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Old 04-02-2018, 06:53 AM View Post #2 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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Hey guys I noticed a plot mistake, They rented a car, but yet, Jeff pulls out a personal item from the back of the truck. How did that get there? I have no idea. My original idea was for them to still have their cars when their conversation took place, but I thought having the characters dispose of them added more to the paranoia of the story. Jeff's car would have had the hat. So this was a mistake where an original idea that was scrapped made its way into the story and I completely forgot. So to attempt to fix it, here is my alteration;

Jeff had the hat, but he did not dig it up from the back of the truck. Instead, he had brought it with him and had it in on of his pockets. He then proceeds to pull the hat out to show Roman.
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