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Old 07-01-2016, 10:36 PM View Post #3 (Link)
Keladry (Offline)
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I see your point, and at its most basic-- just he said, she said-- I would agree about the repetition, but what if it were interspersed better with description?

Interestingly, this person is a published author (self-published, but still) and the text in their book does describe the speaker almost entirely before the speech (but not always). It also seems pretty well-written, from the Amazon excerpt.

Mid buried his face in his hands. "Great."
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