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Old 11-03-2007, 03:27 AM View Post #11 (Link)
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Old 11-04-2007, 05:13 AM View Post #12 (Link)
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No Problem.
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Salem's Lot - Stephen King
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If anyone is wondering, my boyfriend's internet is the absolute worst piece of shit in existence, and it causes my computer to slow down significantly anytime I enter the Chatroom. It also causes the chatroom to freeze anyway, so it's a bit futile to attempt to log in while I'm at his place.
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Old 11-06-2007, 11:18 PM View Post #13 (Link)
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Yeah, for this, I'm going to redo my fantasy satire, but fix the errors and make it much more absurd.
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Old 11-07-2007, 03:20 AM View Post #14 (Link)
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Ok, new announcement. I was going to mix this with the TW site and tell them about it as well but apparently we aren't allowed to link to his site from there or probably vice versa so the two contests shall remain independent of each other...

Ok that is all.


P.S. ooooh satire, I'm always in the mood for that. Also, as of this moment I have received one story and that is from Crocolyle.
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Salem's Lot - Stephen King
A Game of Thrones - GRRM
The Lost Symbol - Dan Brown

If anyone is wondering, my boyfriend's internet is the absolute worst piece of shit in existence, and it causes my computer to slow down significantly anytime I enter the Chatroom. It also causes the chatroom to freeze anyway, so it's a bit futile to attempt to log in while I'm at his place.
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Old 11-09-2007, 11:29 PM View Post #15 (Link)
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I have something I could submit, but it's old rather than newly written...?
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Old 11-12-2007, 01:38 AM View Post #16 (Link)
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I think that's okay... if not i have to withdraw my submission. I asked if it was okay and no one said anything so I assumed it was...

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Old 11-12-2007, 01:44 AM View Post #17 (Link)
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What, you are so disqualified Croc!!!


lol, just kidding. It's fine as long as it follows the rules.
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Salem's Lot - Stephen King
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The Lost Symbol - Dan Brown

If anyone is wondering, my boyfriend's internet is the absolute worst piece of shit in existence, and it causes my computer to slow down significantly anytime I enter the Chatroom. It also causes the chatroom to freeze anyway, so it's a bit futile to attempt to log in while I'm at his place.
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Old 11-12-2007, 02:56 AM View Post #18 (Link)
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Scared me for a minute. My heart is still racing
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Old 11-19-2007, 12:15 AM View Post #19 (Link)
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CaN I GiVe yOu mY StOrY nOw? Here iT iS, EnJoY!



The Journal of Jake Dallaso
I didn’t want to go to the army. I’m not a really tough guy, but hey, at least I’m not a wimp!!! I guess you could say I actually have a heart. Unlike most guys on the football team back home. Roughness and cruelty (and not to mention flirtiness) was all they had. That’s why I wouldn’t fit in. I never did! That’s the reason why I had to go to this filthy army. I could hear my parents saying: honey, we’re doing what’s right for you. You won’t learn anyways in this old country school you’re going to. And plus, you do need to toughen up a bit. And with a good bye kiss, sent me off to this stinkin’ place. Remember I told you I wouldn’t fit in? I was right. The moment I walked through the door, I heard snickers and soft laughter. Then the commander or chief, or whatever he was called, told them to shut their holes. Pretty nourishing, huh? The point of this all was, a 15 year old guy like me, doesn’t belong in a place like here.
The top sergeant (he told me what to call him) introduced me to the whole mob of guys. Mean, tough looking guys. I could imagine them mad with rage, snarling like angry dogs. Uuughh. Got to watch out for them. Oh, and did I mention how tall they were? Yeah, they are humongous!!! Ooh... they greeted me warmly!*cough cough* sarcasm! Let me replay it…uh hum…yo shrimp, wach’ya got there? And they took my backpack, unzipped it, put it upside down, and let all my things fall out. Pretty impressive for the first few minuets of my new army life.
When I was in bed that night, I couldn’t fall asleep. Memories of home flooded over me like a tsunami. I couldn’t get mom out of my head. And dad was just talking on and on. Then, I did the unexpected. I yelled. Yeah, on the top of my lungs. I don’t understand why I even did it. Maybe because I was stressed out, or frustrated, but one thing was for sure, the other guys didn’t like it. They yelled back at me like I wanted to wake them up! I’d be satisfied if they were dead for Pete’s sake! But no!!! They just yelled right in my face. I could have sworn I tasted their foul breath. Yuck! Finally, after what seemed as a 100 years, they stopped. Thank you God! But one thing bothered me. The last words I heard from them are: ya know, you’re never gonna survive this place!!!
And they laughed. They laughed their dumb, (and I admit it) scary laughs.
In the morning, we woke up, got into our itchy uniforms, and ran bout’ 10 freakin’ miles in 2 freakin’ hours, in the hot, scorching Arizona sun. Gosh mister tops something! Give us a break! Or should I say, give me a break. The other guys looked absolutely fine. Not even a drop of sweat. Me? It looked like I just got out of the tub! After the run, we ate breakfast. More like mushy stuff!! You should have seen the food. It looked like mashed potatoes/ cow manure/ a really sloppy sundae. I’m not kiddin’. It tasted even worse. I mean, where do they get this stuff? In the insides of a hog? In the cafeteria, this other kid, he said his name was Mitchell, but guys called him Pop, (short for Popsicle, I could tell why, he was as cold as winter days in Maine) sat next to me. He’s a year older than me, and not much taller, I’m grateful for that. We ended up spending the rest of the day together. I actually managed to get a friend on my first day.
That night passed uneventfully. I just slept soundly. It was a good feeling. I woke up in the morning feeling proud. I have not even the faintest idea why.
It was the same routine as usual. Itchy clothes, 10 miles, breakfast, and other stuff.
I was getting used to the army. That’s surprising. I found myself getting stronger each day. Then one day the top sergeant called me in his office. That’s when the adventures begin.
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Old 11-20-2007, 01:56 AM View Post #20 (Link)
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George I was wondering if you could edit the first post in this thread so it shows the actual new deadline. Therefore people won't get confused.
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