Need help writing a song for a pub scene in my fantasy book

Wizard_sir_Avery · 04-30-2017, 08:12 PM

What I have so far is something, but I am not proud of it. In my book, there's this guy that gets drunk and ends up doing a little foot stomping and singing on a table in a tavern. Can you guys help with the song? Here it is,

"Dance and sing at the jolly old pub
We are the bubs at this pub
have a mug of ale
If you want to run from life just take a sip to bail
I'll up and burst your gritty mug
Beer is a joy, Oh boy
The joy of the Day
Ale is the male off scale
Beer and song is the height of the night all along
When you sing a swing
At yer shady pub"

This isn't going to be all the song. I hope to add more if I can figure out a good topic and rhythm with rhyming. The song in a way is like an Irish jig. It needs to be a song that makes the reader want to dance. And the singer, by the way, has a pretty low voice.

Lykaios · 04-30-2017, 10:01 PM

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Wizard_sir_Avery Literary Newbie Join Date: Apr 2017 Posts: 3 Points: 5 Times Thanked: 0	What I have so far is something, but I am not proud of it. In my book, there's this guy that gets drunk and ends up doing a little foot stomping and singing on a table in a tavern. Can you guys help with the song? Here it is, "Dance and sing at the jolly old pub We are the bubs at this pub have a mug of ale If you want to run from life just take a sip to bail I'll up and burst your gritty mug Beer is a joy, Oh boy The joy of the Day Ale is the male off scale Beer and song is the height of the night all along When you sing a swing At yer shady pub" This isn't going to be all the song. I hope to add more if I can figure out a good topic and rhythm with rhyming. The song in a way is like an Irish jig. It needs to be a song that makes the reader want to dance. And the singer, by the way, has a pretty low voice.

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Lykaios Red-name-person Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: ὡς ἐν ἄλλῳ κόσμῳ Posts: 1,370 Points: 30 Times Thanked: 115	You do not post work here or in the Newbie Section. You post work in the writing forums which you can find by clicking the tab at the top called 'Writing'. Please read the Site Rules, the Critique Guidelines, and the How to Critique Guide as these will help you understand how the site works and how to critique properly. If you have any further questions or worries, please don't hesitate to message me back.