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Old 06-01-2011, 06:24 PM View Post #1 (Link) I want to critique you cruelly.
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I love critiquing. I want to crit your poems and your short stories. (No novels.)
I like poems best, and my crits for them are better, but I like short stories too. I do line-by-line crits, no general overviews.
I could go and pick something out to crit, but I can't choose, and I want to help whoever needs it most.
I'll try to do crits within a week-- probably sooner. I can't promise; if it's, say, Olympic Pentalathon week, I won't do it right away. But I doubt that it will take me a week or more to get to it; poems I'll do quickly. I love to critique.

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Old 06-01-2011, 06:38 PM View Post #2 (Link)
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Can you take a look at my life with the bears? Its long and I wrote it a while ago - so no rush - but I'm curious for thoughts on it. Thank you!!!
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Old 06-01-2011, 06:44 PM View Post #3 (Link)
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Well then, Lalo, tear "All the lonely people" apart, but please please leave leftovers
Originally Posted by Samuel Beckett, Worstward Ho
The void. Before the staring eyes. Stare where they may. Far and wide. High and low. That narrow field. Know no more. See no more. Say no more. That alone. That little much of void alone.
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Old 06-02-2011, 09:34 PM View Post #4 (Link)
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Yes, Lalo hit me hard and clear with my dull, red death story .
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Old 07-25-2011, 06:56 PM View Post #5 (Link)
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It's really really short, so it'll only take a few minutes. Please critique extremely accurately, leaving nothing behind, because this is the beginning to a great story I've been working on forever!
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Old 07-25-2011, 07:21 PM View Post #6 (Link)
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Awww, my story is a novel. D: Even if there is only one chapter up.
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Old 08-10-2012, 06:42 PM View Post #7 (Link) This post contains more of my work
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Bump-a-du-bump. With the poetry contest on hiatus (until someone asks me for one, at which time I will sneer demeaningly and kick the machine into running shape) I'd love to critique your horrid poetry or (only very short) short stories or experimentals. If it's longer than one page you will be sorry (and abandoned), shorter than that, well, it's my choice. But I'm rather willing.

Originally Posted by Julian View Post
Yes, Lalo hit me hard and clear with my dull, red death story .
Didn't realize this thread was so old.
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Old 09-18-2012, 10:23 AM View Post #8 (Link)
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I'd love a critique on my short story!

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Old 04-27-2013, 05:35 AM View Post #9 (Link)
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your welcome to critique one of my poems (probably either, "don't leave me in the dark", "needles", or "a broken girl". but there's no hurry. thankyou
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