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Old 04-23-2017, 04:54 PM View Post #1 (Link) To all the Haters
Charlotte S (Offline)
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I was told I couldn't do it
They knocked down my confidence bit by bit
They told me I wasn't worth the work people put in
I was told my writing was wrong, like a sin.

To the hater who thought they could play me
This is what I'm gonna do, don't you see?
It doesn't matter what you say
I'm not gonna stop, not today, no matter what you made me feel like yesterday.

Believe me, I believed you once upon a time
I was dying inside as I said I was fine
But in the end it is just an opinion that I can ignore
So I don't need to listen to you anymore.

So to all the haters who think they are right
Be ready for a fight
Because I will sing a song
Whilst I prove you wrong.
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Old 05-04-2017, 05:41 AM View Post #2 (Link) Response for "To all the Haters"
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I really like your poem because it tells the same kind of experiences others face when dealing with haters. It's inspiring how you talk about putting up a fight and proving all of the hater's wrong. Everyone is there own person and they should live their lives however they want, no matter what the haters say. Good job!
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Old 06-12-2017, 05:11 PM View Post #3 (Link)
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Originally Posted by Charlotte S View Post
I was told I couldn't do it
They knocked down my confidence bit by bit
They told me I wasn't worth the work people put in
I was told my writing was wrong, like a sin.

To the hater who thought they could play me
This is what I'm gonna do, don't you see?
It doesn't matter what you say
I'm not gonna stop, not today, no matter what you made me feel like yesterday.

Believe me, I believed you once upon a time
I was dying inside as I said I was fine
But in the end it is just an opinion that I can ignore
So I don't need to listen to you anymore.

So to all the haters who think they are right
Be ready for a fight
Because I will sing a song
Whilst I prove you wrong.
Wow.. I must say you have improved a lot more than I can explain.. Your writings are being phenomenal.. I really enjoy what you write.. Perfect sense of writing .. A very prominent matter to write on.. Good use of words.. I must say it's pitch perfect.
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Old 06-12-2017, 07:02 PM View Post #4 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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Originally Posted by Sayandeep Sahoo View Post
Wow.. I must say you have improved a lot more than I can explain.. Your writings are being phenomenal.. I really enjoy what you write.. Perfect sense of writing .. A very prominent matter to write on.. Good use of words.. I must say it's pitch perfect.
Thank you so much! This made my day!
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Old 06-12-2017, 08:35 PM View Post #5 (Link) Critique
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Keep writing! The worst poems you write are the first ones you write. I don't think this is your best possible work, but I encourage you to keep trying. If you want to look at easy poems to write, Google different rhyme schemes, and then work your way to rhythm. There are many styles to write a poem, so if you want to go for something out of the box, then make up your own style.

With that being said, I think the content of your poem is strong. You have a great message, and I encourage you to keep writing to hone your skills.
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Old 08-28-2017, 12:31 AM View Post #6 (Link)
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I really liked the poem as I can relate to it.
Rhyming is good...and i liked the lines when u said to be ready for a fight as life is all about fight or flight!!
  
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Old 09-07-2017, 04:59 PM View Post #7 (Link) this is good
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I think that this poem is quite good and i love how easy it is to relate
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