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Old 09-06-2017, 01:53 AM View Post #1 (Link) Okay
HawaiianParadise (Offline)
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I know you soothed my suffering all day
I know you said that I would be okay
But what about now
What about now
What about now
What do you say now?

I know you said "Don't worry, you won't die"
I know you said I wouldn't have to say goodbye
But what about now
What about now
What about now
What do you say now?

When I see you
My heart brightens at the sight
When I see you
There's a temporary light
When I see you
The fog is washed away
You say I will be okay

I know you were there throughout my pain
I know you were there day after day
But what about now
What about now
What about now
Where are you now?

I know you were there when I could only cry
I know you were there when I thought I'd die
But what about now
What about now
What about now
Where are you now?

When I see you
My heart brightens at the sight
When I see you
There's a temporary light
When I see you
The fog is washed away
You say I will be okay
I will be okay
I will be okay
  
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Old 09-07-2017, 09:53 PM View Post #2 (Link) Review
WordWizard (Offline)
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In this one, I like both the emotion and the repetitiveness.
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