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Old 03-11-2014, 05:04 AM View Post #1 (Link) The Bunny is open for critiques
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I've finally got some free time and I'll be able to do some critiques. So, if you'd like a critique, you can feel free to ask me for them on this thread. I'll also keep a list of the critiques that I need to do here.

NOTE: I do not do critiques for poems or lyrics. I do critiques for short stories, novel chapters and sometimes, experimental as well.

To critique:
1. Valentine Week Phobia - pranjal
2. Confinement (Chapter 4) - MonaLon
3. A Ride To Win - Pony123
4. Rocks, rookies and Venus - Chrissy Noelle
5. Untitled - ThatPsycho
6. Celestial War Chapter 1 - Libra
7. Abadhura - Psychosis - Geradain
8. Aunt Shannon - Dabs
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Old 03-11-2014, 06:40 PM View Post #2 (Link)
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Could you take a look at ride to win?
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Old 03-12-2014, 09:28 PM View Post #3 (Link)
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Could you peek at my Rocks, Rookies, and Venus short story? It definetly needs some work, but I don't know where. I think it's pretty good so far.
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Old 03-18-2014, 11:28 PM View Post #4 (Link)
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Please could you look at chapter 1 of my currently untitled story?
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Old 04-08-2014, 09:30 PM View Post #5 (Link)
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Hey man, i'd love to get past my first chapter (had to re-write and re-write) so i can get the meat of my novel reviewed, would be appreciated.

http://www.youngwritersonline.net/sh...ad.php?t=13104
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Old 04-09-2014, 12:18 PM View Post #6 (Link)
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Sure, I'll get to it. Just remember that it might take sometime, since there's a waiting list.
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Old 04-17-2014, 08:18 AM View Post #7 (Link)
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If you have free time, could you please review the first chapter of my Fists of Blood story? Thanks in advance.
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Old 12-03-2014, 05:28 AM View Post #8 (Link)
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If you could crit my first chapter in my "Rocky Mountain Chronicles "that would be great! Here is the link: http://www.youngwritersonline.net/sh...ad.php?t=13862
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Old 03-23-2015, 03:05 PM View Post #9 (Link)
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I'm bumping this thread, since I'm finally back after a long hiatus and ready to critique again. So, if you want a critique, you can post on this thread or VM me, and I'll get to it as soon as I can.
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Old 03-23-2015, 06:08 PM View Post #10 (Link)
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Can you critique my piece "Aunt Shannon"? It's been sitting there with only one review for a while.
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