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Old 02-07-2018, 08:44 PM View Post #1 (Link) Battle for Japan: Serpents & Whales through the Gateway
Gyasi Myles (Offline)
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(pt 1 Serpents & Whales through the Gateway, pt 2 An Empress's Scroll, pt 3 Peach Trees of Immortality, pt 4 Ryujin's Tide Jewels, pt 5 The Red-headed Girl's Coffer, pt 6 Mutants vs. Shinto Deities)

Battle for Japan
Serpents & Whales through the Gateway

Orca (killer whale) pulsed calls, clicks, and whistles. Sea serpent hiss. One large bell's ring.

FADE IN:

Pacific Ocean map. We zoom in.

EXT. CARNIVAL CRUISE SHIP DECK - NIGHT

In male high school uniform, CHUJITSUNA sofa lounges poolside, thumbs through manga, starts reading military tactics book instead. In skirted female high school uniform, YORU sofa lounges poolside, plays video game.

Other passengers seen on deck besides them. Yoru pulls notebook from backpack, starts sketching yokai (Japanese folklore creatures). Gi with green belt rests on her lap. On naval destroyers, NAVY SAILORS approach them.

CHUJITSUNA

Uh-oh Yoru, we're in Dragon's Triangle, aka Devil's Sea. You'll vanish into another world, since this one bores you and you feel you don't belong here.

YORU

Hope you're right Chujitsuna, don't even wanna master martial arts anymore.

She tosses gi and green belt down into ocean, hears ghostly whispers, looks around, ship's power goes out.

YORU

Ole wrinkly face spirits always stalking me; I can't stand being a medium.

CHUJITSUNA

Name-calling ain't nice, what spirits?

NAVY SAILORS
(Through megaphones)

Furimuku! Turn around now!

Ship vibrates from seaquake rumble. Smothered in Japanese inscriptions, giant marble torii (Shinto gate) rises from ocean floor, towers out of waves.

Screams from passengers, large bell dangles under gate's bottom crosspiece, rings by itself. Maelstrom forms around its gate posts/uprights, cruise ship's sucked in, rotated about.

Passenger in life jacket leaps from ship, lands with arms and legs wrapped halfway around an upright/gate post, slides down it, yells once they slip off then fall. Ship vanishes through the torii.

CUT TO.

EXT. CARNIVAL CRUISE SHIP DECK - SUNDOWN

No maelstrom, ship drifts from under/out of torii. Screams from passengers who cringe. An IKUCHI, hissing oily sea serpent slithers on deck, floods it with oil, dives into ocean, passengers wiggle stuck within the sticky oil.

Ikuchi overturns ship, ship sinks, all passengers submerged with it. The sea serpent devours them, misses Yoru and Chujitsuna.

Approaching them from every direction, orca pods meet up with KING MIZU the killer whale and his pod.

Underwater zip a squad of ningyo (monstrous mermen and mermaids) who tote kunai knives, cut drowning Chujitsuna and Yoru loose from the oil, swim them to the ocean's surface, move their tails from side to side instead of up and down since they have caudal fins unlike greek mermaids who have flukes for tails. Mizu spits out bloodstained head of ikuchi hatchling.

KING MIZU

Here Ikuchi, we're even now.

IKUCHI

Keep it Mizu. Ah, payback for when I constricted your newborn to death.

Torii retracts beneath ocean, one big splash from it. Between archipelago/cluster of swampy islands' shores nearby, an overturned 21st century cargo ship, large opened zoo cages beside it.

KING MIZU

Kōgeki!

Orca pod shape-shifts into clear seawater, chases ikuchi onto swampy island. It huddles with its countless hatchlings near massive cracked eggs. Chujitsuna gapes at Tokyo Bay, its shoreside city looks ancient.

CHUJITSUNA

Wow, time travel exists; we're in a feudal age with folklore monsters. Is this another lucid nightmare, or am I just having an LSD trip again?

YORU

Not sure, but this is what I call a field trip!

CUT TO.

INT. MOONLIT UNDERWATER TUNNEL - NIGHT

As water, Mizu and his pod wash Yoru and Chujitsuna into underwater cave, surface outside of Japanese castle, revert to their whale forms.

YORU

Um, c-can we get a hold your breath next time?

CHUJITSUNA

Shh! Whoa.

Ningyo guard castle entrance alongside sazae-oni (shellfish ogres and ogresses). Mizu stops the sazae-oni when they try to eat Chujitsuna and Yoru. Both creatures are equipped with katana swords, fukiya blowguns, kunai knives, bow with arrow filled quiver strapped to their backs, sodegarami (multi-pronged spears).

Great white sharks, tiger sharks, bull sharks, bottlenose dolphins, tusked narwhals, and ushi-oni (demon ox crabs) patrol castle's flooded corridors.

DISSOLVE TO.

INT. FLOODED CASTLE ROOM - NIGHT

Mizu lounges inside of opened gigantic clamshell. Chujitsuna and Yoru inside of it with him. They float between rows of pillars.

YORU

Y'all must have those sea serpents facing extinction.

KING MIZU

Yes, they're man-eaters endangered by my navy. And if they overpopulate, humans might not exist in your twenty-first century.

KING MIZU (CONT'D)

Luckily my orcas patrol the seven seas nonstop, any nation besides Japan would be too far and risky for the ikuchi to try and reach.

CHUJITSUNA

That don't sound too good. Lemme join your navy and help kill them then!

YORU

Watashi mo.

CUT TO.

INT. WATER FILLED MOAT OF JAPANESE CASTLE ON SWAMPY ISLAND- DAWN

CHIEF HACHURUI, adult male albino saltwater crocodile wrestles this full-grown male nile crocodile, a full-grown male american crocodile, one adult male american alligator, plus an adult male Chinese alligator who all attack him at once four against one.

He overpowers each, has flashbacks of being bullied over his pigment as a hatchling, starts fighting even harder.

CHIEF HACHURUI

That's all you got!? You call yourselves warriors?!

IKUCHI

That's enough Hachurui, don't slaughter your comrades.

CHIEF HACHURUI
(Stops fighting, bows to the sea serpent)

Please forgive me Lord Ikuchi.

CUT TO.

INT. FLOODED DOJO - NIGHT

With katanas in scabbards strapped to their backs, Chujitsuna and Yoru breaststroke inside.

ADMIRAL TATSUMAKI, adult male ningyo, swims upright out of water, tosses Chujitsuna twin kunai knives with a sodegarami, Yoru a fukiya blowgun, hands her a quiver filled with arrows and a bow, draws one sodegarami plus a katana of his own.

ADMIRAL TATSUMAKI

Kumite!

Orcas shape-shift into water, raise Yoru and Chujitsuna above dojo's water, move them around as they both strike at Tatsumaki using all of their weapons.

Tatsumaki dodges both, uses his weapons to block both, takes sword stabs and gashes from both, kunai gashes and stabs from Chujitsuna, gets sodegarami pronged by him, gets a bow arrow flung into his body by Yoru, gets blowgun darted by her, stumbles then drops weapons in pain, draws twin kunai, kunai pries darts from his body draining the poison, tosses kunai aside, yanks arrow from his body.

He picks up his sodegarami and katana, Chujitsuna hurls twin kunai. In slo-mo, Tatsumaki backflip dodges both, speed returns to normal, he lands with a bellyflop, strikes back at them.

ADMIRAL TATSUMAKI

Yoi tatakai; kiai!

While still moved around Chujitsuna and Yoru are missed, shielded by water walls, splashes as they’re tail fin smacked around by Tatsumaki, forced to sword parry his weapon blows.

Tatsumaki stops attacking them, bloody sword cuts and prong holes left on them as they both gasp, get lowered by water onto stretchers then held afloat. Tatsumaki bandages them, the water disguised orcas return to whale form.

CUT TO.

EXT. JUST OFF FEUDAL HONSHU'S PACIFIC COAST – DAY

Uninjured Yoru and Chujitsuna draw weapons, stand on seperate canoes. Canoes' pointed front ends grow eyes, a mouth with razor-sharp teeth, sides grow monstrous limbs, back ends grow several octopus tentacle tails which they wag.

They’re amidst bull sharks, tiger sharks, large manta rays, tusked narwhals, great whites, bottlenose dolphins that squeak, ushi-oni, armed sazae-oni who swim upright out of water, armed ningyos who swim upright out of water, have their long sharp puffer fish spines stick out all-over their bodies, spouting orcas that wield zanbatos (large popsicle-shaped swords) between teeth.

ADMIRAL TATSUMAKI
(Unsheathes katana)

Blockade the mainlands!

Across from them, from off cluster of swampy islands' shores charge anacondas, huge overgrown electric eels, crocs that bellow, gators, caimans, akamataa (pit vipers with torsos and arms) sidewinding above water as they hold katanas, fukiyas, kunai, scythes, plus bow and arrows, kappas (turtle goblins) who tote kunai, battle axes, bow and arrows, plus kusarigama chain-sickles as they swim upright out of water by moving their webbed feet, pony-tailed humanoid serpent yokai known as KIYOHIME who sidewinds above water, nure-onnas (large snakes with frog arms and the head of a woman) who hiss bearing their vampire fangs, twig-fingered giant swamp monsters made of dangly moss with muddy freshwater pouring from their insides as they wade through the sea, plus ikuchis that carry zanbatos with their tails.

KIYOHIME
(Draws twin kunai, breathes out fire)

Victory's ours!

Tatsumaki and his frontline charge. Those swimming canoe monsters roar, swiftly carry Yoru and Chujitsuna into battle, help them fight nure-onnas who bite them then suck their blood. Both sides start warring, their arrow barrages block out the sun.

Sharks bite enemy monsters, fight crocs, gators, caimans, anacondas, and overgrown electric eels with the help of narwhals who tusk stab each. Dolphins ram into enemy animals and monsters, leaping manta rays tail stab all foes, anacondas constrict enemies to death.

Orcas sword fight with ikuchis, fluke swipe some, headbutt and ram against others, shape-shift into water, splash against foes knocking them lifeless, become whirlpools to spin enemies dizzy, a tsunami to shove others around, quickly evaporate into clouds, disguise themselves as rain for plummeting whale form sneak attacks, shoot huge bubbles from their blowholes that go KABOOM when they pop/explode then fatally thrust foes away.

Ikuchis swallow seawater, jet the seawater from their mouths, amputate, behead, or have enemies bleed to death when pressure-washing them, oil stick others together leaving each motionless. Swamp monsters turn the sea brown causing all whales and sharks to flounder/move slower.

KIYOHIME
(While fighting Chujitsuna)

If I can't have you; then no woman will.

CHUJITSUNA

Yeah right; whatever, your fire breath gave me third degree burns last week in that swamp castle; I hate you.

FADE TO.

EXT. FLOODED SHORESIDE FEUDAL HONSHU VILLAGE WITH DAMAGED HOUSES - EVENING

On one of those roaring canoe monsters Yoru drifts away. Her gi with belt washed ashore. She smirks at both, snatches them up, squeezes water out, stuffs them in her backpack.

YORU

Got some exploring to do around here, maybe we'll all meet again someday.

CHUJITSUNA
(In waist-deep water beside Mizu)

But what about folks in the twenty-first century; they'll miss you.

On a rooftop, mooing cow gives birth to folklore creature known as KUDAN (calf with the face of an elderly man). Everyone turns their heads towards him to listen.

KUDAN

Yoru Hoshi and Chujitsuna will become two of Earth's most powerful warriors.

Kudan's eyes shut, buzzing flies swarm around his quickly rotting carcass till there's nothing but a calf skeleton left.

DISSOLVE TO.

INT. KELP FOREST - DUSK

Protective bubble suit around Chujitsuna's body so he can breathe and swim at super-speeds, top of giant torii seen sticking up out of the ocean floor, Mizu bumps against it several times. It rises, Chujitsuna swims through it vanishing.

FADE OUT.
  
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Old 03-04-2018, 02:40 AM View Post #2 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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Lotta improvement would be nice, too lazy tho lol. Esp. with last 3... Just luv to share imagination with y'all.
  
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Old 03-31-2018, 02:36 PM View Post #3 (Link)
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wonderufl .
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Old 04-11-2018, 09:32 PM View Post #4 (Link) This post is a reply - don't critique it
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Thanks for reading if u did lol. Too much action not enough dialogue must get tedious.
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